What does it all add up to?

Churning stomach, quickened heartbeat, sweating palms, stopped clock.

‘We need to talk’, he said.

Caught in the headlights of this moment I nod, sit down.

His words wash over me: facts, hypothesis, solution.

I see his relief, the problem is now mine.

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20 thoughts on “What does it all add up to?

  1. Ugh, the dreaded for words. I’d like to keep pretending that the task was bittersweet and not devastating for her.
    Love this piece!

  2. How that turn of carrying the problem is disliked! I hate to be facing those 4words, but wouldn’t mibd being the one talking 😉 my work’s done. Haha!

  3. I loved this line especially: “Caught in the headlights of this moment.” Great description. That’s exactly how I feel when someone says, “We need to talk.”

  4. I like how, because you didn’t specify exactly what he said to her, it’s easy for the reader to get the uncomfortable feeling that comes from having personally experienced one of these moments, details aside.

  5. This would be a great opening to a novel or short story. We read and interpret through the the prism of our own life filters. We’ve all been on the giving and the receiving ends of this conversation. Creative and insightful.

  6. You got the emotions of an impending break up just right here. I especially like the last line where suddenly his decision is the narrator’s problem. Tables turned.

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